`Though the essay is written very well, could it be improved further??I mean in the starting some pages, the content was lacking coherence and it was later only that all his words started moving in the same direction..Also, does writing causes or consequences in a sequence help??I mean could we be like writing causes from childhood(less focus on female education, pressuring here towards household chores) to middle ages(child marriage, high dropout around this time) to later ages(when women are discriminated in jobs)??Please help, and do point out if you felt my point was unwarranted
Adverse air quality can kill many organisms including humans. Ozone pollution can cause respiratory disease , cardiovascular disease , throat inflammation, chest pain, and congestion . Water pollution causes approximately 14,000 deaths per day, mostly due to contamination of drinking water by untreated sewage in developing countries . An estimated 500 million Indians have no access to a proper toilet,   Over ten million people in India fell ill with waterborne illnesses in 2013, and 1,535 people died, most of them children.  Nearly 500 million Chinese lack access to safe drinking water.  A 2010 analysis estimated that million people died prematurely each year in China because of air pollution.  The WHO estimated in 2007 that air pollution causes half a million deaths per year in India.  Studies have estimated that the number of people killed annually in the United States could be over 50,000. 
Just a note to Anti-Commie – these images may not have been Photoshopped. I studied photography in college for a couple of years, and it doesn’t matter whether you are using film or digital, nearly all high quality images are “manipulated” for contrast and exposure, intensity or lack or intensity in the photograph’s colours. I did colour negative printing as well as black and white, and colouration can be manipulated/altered printing “traditional style” colour prints. This kind of image manipulation went in on colour magazines for years prior to the invention of Photoshop.